Just what I need: another distraction. But this one didn’t take too long and I could whip it out in an hour or so. Besides, like the anthology, it’s a chance to get published. Sort of. Not the snobby-nose-in-the-air kind of publishing. Not the I-am-getting-paid kind either. But the vanity, self-publishing-for-free kind.
Here’s where I need you. I need you to vote for my submission in this little venture. I am submitting a segment to a longer story that is being written as we go. It’s like a progressive dinner, where the party-goers have cocktails at house #1, appetizers at house #2, salad at house #3, and so on.
The host blog for this never-ending story is The Bradley Chronicles. You can read about the details of the overall project here:
http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/indie-500/
There has already been one segment selected and added to the original prompt. It is from this point that my submission, which you can read below, starts. I will be adding a comment at the end of the post at this link. If I understand how the contest is being conducted, it is on my comment where you will do the voting. Please vote for me. This is for fun — not English composition class.
It was fun writing this. I had to go into my man brain. I ran the submission by my husband to see if what I wrote rang true (manspeak, shifting gears, and all things manly and unmanly that happen to the character). He gave it a pass. I hope you will, too, and vote for me. Please, please, please. (And if you submit a segment, let me know and I will vote for you.)
http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/04/29/indie-500-2/
The voices in Jacob’s head chattered.
Jakey Boy, any plans you had to visit that cute redheaded bartender tonight are out the window if you do anything but get back in your car. Now.
You can’t do that! This guy is hurt. You’ve gotta help.
Are you kidding me? His face is all over the news. This smells like trouble. Move your ass now while you still have a chance.
Oh, god. Is that a gun in his hip pocket? No. Whoever beat him up wouldn’t leave him with a gun, would they? Why does he have a gun? If he has a gun, why is he beat up?
Are you fricking stupid? Run, you bastard. Run. Now.
Something in that last thought rang true to Jacob as the man’s eyes flew open, locking Jacob in his sights. Jacob felt ice form around his heart, threatening to shut off his blood flow. His face paled and his body drew into itself. Rather than follow his instinct to bolt, Jacob started backing slowly toward his car as he spoke. He watched for any movement from the man on the pavement.
“Hang in there, Buddy. I got a first aid kit in the back seat. Lemme get it.” He was walking faster now, backwards, as he continued. “You need to call somebody? Let me get my cell phone. You can call whoever you want to.”
The man was straightening out his legs and beginning to roll over to his stomach as Jacob turned and ran the last couple of feet to the car. He jumped behind the wheel, shoved the car in gear, and stomped the gas. He ducked his head, raking the gears, as he heard gunshots ring out behind him. The driver’s door swung loose. There was no time to pull it shut.
“Shit. Shit. Shit. Holy Jesus,” he muttered, concentrating on keeping his head low and putting as much distance as he could between the gunman and himself. He ran the Saab close to the red line before shifting. When he hit the first right hand curve, the driver’s door swung out, away from him. Only then, did he dare to slide upward and check his rear view mirror. He saw nothing because the curve in the road obscured his would-be murderer from sight. As he grabbed the door handle and yanked the door shut, he felt his hand shaking. The shaking traveled up his arm to his shoulder, spreading on to his torso. His teeth started to ricochet off each other so violently, he thought the teeth would chip.
“Son of a bitch,” he shouted, glancing down. The front of his pants were wet, the warm dampness spreading across his lap and down between his legs.
If only a comment is necessary to vote, consider this comment mine. I would love to read more about what happens, what brought Jake to the point in the story we find him, and the chance to get to know the other players in the game Jake seems to have found himself. Good luck, Fay!
Thanks for the quick response! I think to vote one has to go to the guy’s post, look for my comment on the most recent Indie 500 post, and there’s a voting box tied to my comment. Crazy and convoluted, but I’d appreciate your help. It’s kind of a wacky, but fun, way to write a story.
Hrere’s the link – it answers your questions about Jake, th character.
http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
Fixed it!
I like this! I am going to start playing too!
Does my comment and like count as a vote? 😀
You have to go to his page, the most recent Indie 500 segment and look for my comment in the list. Then vote on my comment — there should be a way to do that. At least that is how it looks to me. Thanks a bunch. Let me know when you submit yours — just don’t do it now or we’ll compete.
hahah ok I won’t!
I rated it 5 stars! Does it work? 🙂
Yes, I think so. ❤ xoxo
Awesome! I hope you had a great weekend 😀 x
I would love to vote for your submission, but I didn’t see your comment on his post (other than a pingback)?
Please let me know when you show up and I’ll be glad to throw you some well-deserved props =]
❤ Thank you. Look here http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/04/29/indie-500-2/#comments
In the list of comments, you'll see me with a "rate this" widget. Please use that to vote for me. xoxo
You have my vote…please keep me posted on the progression of the story. Your portion is fabulous, leaving me wanting to read more…great job!
❤ xoxo
All writers like a little loving of their work. When one makes a faux pas as I did (see today's post), the loving eases the bruising the ego takes. Thanks for the loving.
I think there is always room to be kinder to ourselves. For if its perfection we want instead of the joy in the journey…we would never write a word.
You speak truth.
Please read my blog tomorrow…I think its going to be a lot of fun for all…(I’m trying something new!)
See you then.
Nice job! I will go place my vote. 🙂
XOXO